hm, i took a look at your manga pages, you are better than you think on paneling, they are clear to read, even when there's alot going on. Stuff i would suggest is: 1. improve overall finish, on lineart, black and white shapes relationships 2. Use negative space between panels for emotional expression 3. Use more long shots, and shots from above or lower angle. 4. Try using more vertical composition, you have a lot of horizontal based panels, you can try something more vertical looking.
the usage of negative space is sort of a shoujo trait, more shoujo uses it: [link] D.N.Angel has perfect examples where negative space is used for emotions.
Naruto has a bit: [link] (top panel on this one) The sequence where he describes Gara's pain is the best sequence on his negative space, but most of shonen's negative space are framed, while shoujo's are open.
Example of vertical composition: [link] I personally like the open space rather than the closed one.
To close a space and give it weight, use black. To make it seem open and airy, just leave it white.
1. improve overall finish, on lineart, black and white shapes relationships
2. Use negative space between panels for emotional expression
3. Use more long shots, and shots from above or lower angle.
4. Try using more vertical composition, you have a lot of horizontal based panels, you can try something more vertical looking.
That's about it. You are on the right track.
Oh about point 2. What do you mean negative space? Can you show me examples?
D.N.Angel has perfect examples where negative space is used for emotions.
Naruto has a bit: [link] (top panel on this one)
The sequence where he describes Gara's pain is the best sequence on his negative space, but most of shonen's negative space are framed, while shoujo's are open.
Example of vertical composition: [link]
I personally like the open space rather than the closed one.
To close a space and give it weight, use black. To make it seem open and airy, just leave it white.